Rain Down on Me | Quick Piece Breakdown

Rain Down on Me

First of all, I’m sorry for not publishing this yesterday; I hope this will do. Secondly, it seems that I’m writing more romance stories! Let me know how I’m doing in this genre and if you like it. I would really appreciate your feedback! Also, I want to increase the amount of blog posts, but I can’t exactly guarantee that because this last month of school is getting to be quite hectic.

Now, let’s get started with this analysis.

On a first read, this story follows a woman’s stream of consciousness. She had just separated from her husband after being in disagreement with him for years. The couple has attempted to hide their disagreements and the fact that they no longer love each other from the public. The woman breaks down after driving away and finds herself crying into the rain, hence the title, rain down on me. Along comes her neighbor, someone she was certain didn’t know about her situation and her neighbor instructs her to come back with her and to talk it out. Reluctantly, the woman follows her and listens to a story that her neighbor tells her. Her neighbor tells the woman how she met her husband. Through this story, the woman reflects on her situation. At the end, I don’t tell you how it ends up whether her husband is furious with her for leaving, whether they work it out for a little, but it still ends up falling apart, whether she divorces him and starts fresh. We don’t know. It’s the mystery that drives this story.

If you’ve been reading my stories for a while, then you may know why I chose to leave the characters unnamed. I wanted the audience to be able to connect with the characters and to also have a loose personality, but with strong dialogue and backstory in order to make them feel real. They could be you.

Also, in this story, there is a lot of internal dialogue. The woman explains to the audience how her relationship with her husband is going as well as what they’re trying to do to keep themselves private and isolated. The woman also questions her decisions without ever vocalizing them. Once again, by writing it close to a stream of consciousness, I wanted the audience to be able to relate with it.

I made sure to parallel, “The rain pelted down the windshield, the wipers barely able to catch up.” to give the audience a flashback moment or just to help the audience bring them back to the current situation after a long paragraph of explanations and backstory. And that goes for the title, rain down on me. It could literally mean that as the woman got out of the car and started to scream, rain was falling on her. I was going to have her be angry at God and everyone else and to scream, “Rain down on me!” but I think we can already infer that without the dialogue. The title also means that her sorrows are finally coming down on her and she’s accepting it. Through her acceptance of what went wrong, she can move forwards and follow through with the second step.

As for the neighbor, I wanted her message to be that your pain doesn’t go unnoticed. Her neighbor knew because she has been through something similar, so she decided to help. She doesn’t really force her opinions onto the woman, but just told the woman what she had been through as a guide of what to do. I guess the neighbor could be considered as “neutral good” if going by the alignment system.

Anyways, I hope you enjoyed the story and analysis!

Alice

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