I See You|Poetry Breakdown

Hello once again! I hope your day has been well and I hope you enjoy this week’s Poetry breakdown!

I wrote this poem for the 30/30 Challenge on April 20, 2014. The prompt for that poem was alone with everybody.

I See You

I see you
on the outskirts of everybody
with one foot gingerly inside
and the other firmly holding your place.
I see you
looking up on the occasion
whenever the laughter roars a little louder
or when silence draws near.
I see you
inching closer to pull back.
I see you.
I understand how it’s like to be alone with everybody.
How we dance back and forth with the crowd and lights
swaying like a meaningful tempest.
Come be alone with everybody with me
so we won’t sink
either way.

I really like this poem that I wrote because I feel like I really captured what it’s like to look around and see someone outside of the group. At least how I feel on both sides of the spectrum.

This poem is actually inspired by one of my friends. I always see my friend on the outside of the group and I never like it when people are left out. This poem is also how I feel at times too.

I start the poem with a longing to be accepted as well as a fear of what to expect hence the feet in different places. To me, the feet really the soul of a person because it takes the person places.

Every single sentence after the parallel I see you are basically longing feelings as well as unexpected fear. I parallel I see you as a reminder that I do see and it basically means I understand.  At the end of the I see yous, I blatantly say “I understand how it’s like to be alone with everybody.” I can imagine someone with their hands around someone’s face  saying that after that someone denied their understanding. The words alone with everybody really invokes a feeling of wanting to not be left out anymore and wanting to become a part of the group, but having difficulties so you’re left watching.

Now, I use the pronoun, we with the line “How we dance back and forth with the crowd and lights swaying like a meaningful tempest.” as proof that I do understand. Meaningful tempest… If you read my previous Poetry Breakdown, I wrote about a storm and how at the end of the storm, there would be clear skies which are more appreciated because of the storm. That’s what being lonely before joining in is like- a meaningful storm.

I continue the illustration of a tempest on the last sentence of the poem and throw in the prompt once more with my personal concern for the person- to not be caught up with being too alone or to be overwhelmed by the intensity of the group can get at times. To just be in a happy medium.

Essentially, this poem is about being yourself again. You don’t have to fit in with the popular kids or resign to the corner. Just be yourself.


And that is the finale of this week’s poetry breakdown. I’ll see you next week with the next poem!




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